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  1. This short story was published at opera blog in sept 2009,due to new policy of myopera.com i am shiffting my enite blog at wordpress therefore comments as well.

    Unregistered user # Wednesday, September 30, 2009 8:24:19 AM
    gull ahmed writes: slam bro, story achi hy ….bahut achi hay..kia true story hay ya sara afsana hy ?

    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Wednesday, September 30, 2009 1:31:06 PM
    gul jan e ali!koi afsana dar haqeeqat afsana kabhi nahi hota!koi dard ki kahani maun gharat nahi hoa karti!bass naam maqam aur waqt badal jata ha!yun haqeeqat say afsana ban jata ha!

    Khair Bakhshkhairbakhsh # Friday, October 23, 2009 8:57:28 PM
    Wow! Excellent Short story! You done a great job Mufti. Keep it up. smile

    Unregistered user # Tuesday, October 27, 2009 3:38:58 PM
    Anonymous writes: Please eliminate sex from ur stories, u have some talent dont waste it, and dont try to be Manto. My suggestion might be bitter but the truth is nevr try to be popular by writing vulger, one day u’ll be a shamed of it. once again u have talent, use it in a positive way, Youth of pakistan needs strong character which can be built by young writers like u. I hope u dont mind my critisium, I red both of ur stories 🙂

    Khair Bakhshkhairbakhsh # Tuesday, October 27, 2009 3:48:12 PM
    IbnMufti, I am 100% agree with this Anonymous friend of your. >>>>> this is reply from ibnemufti to khairbksh……Janab hum ap ko assa na samjhtay thay k halki si hawa chali aur ap lagay ghabranay…kam say kam hamray jawab hi ka intezar kar leya hota!!ah..!

    Khair Bakhshkhairbakhsh # Tuesday, October 27, 2009 6:13:50 PM
    Naheen yaar, aap jo samanj rahe ho aisa bilkul nahee hay. Mera matlab hay keh aap apni tehreeroon main sex or vulgarism ka sahara mat lijiye. Manto , Asmat Chughtai kee tahreerain and Josh ki poetry sirf sex based hargiz naheen thee. Un main tahreer ki nifasat and kalam ki baibaki sub shamil thee.

    Aap ki donoo short stories excellent the laikin mujhay aap ka pehle wala ziada passand aaya. Aaap shoq se aisee tehreerain likhain laikin kabhee bhee future main sirf sex ya open khule pan ka sahara na lijiye. Yeh tareeka short term main to kamyab ho sakta hay laikin long term main nahee.

    Yaar Mufti, kia aap ne Anonymous commenting ka option khula rakha hay kia keh log aap ko comment bheg dete hain laikin main unke profile khol nahee pata.

    Unregistered user # Tuesday, October 27, 2009 7:18:41 PM
    Anonymous writes: Respected Khairbakhsh, I agree that Manto, Asmat Chughtai etc were very telanted and their stories were powerful that why they are well known writers, verna tu koi un ko na janta, but I have red many writers and got to the point that if a writer want to survive, he may not have to depend on sexual subjects. Those writers were very talented but they should have used their talent in Moral stories (truth or fiction). As a Muslim nation we dont need such writers but we need true guidence. I hope Abi Mufti ( he name resenbles a famous writer too) will prove that he dosen’t want this SAHARA to be known as a good writer. 🙂

    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Tuesday, October 27, 2009 8:03:13 PM
    thanks for criticism unknown but i know who r u!and i wanna reply u in parts!ur preliminary objections r!
    1)Please eliminate sex from ur stories!
    Ans;should i tell u the importance of sex and the role of it in life’s of Momin and mominat!many of verses and hadith are on this!can u call them vulgar as without considering the intention behind them?
    2) the truth is never try to be popular by writing vulgar!
    Ans) do u thinks that truth needs popularity?where i am of the view that the status of truth is beyond what you said!
    3) dont try to be Manto!
    Ans)if you r saying this just because i have skills in urdu like him then you r wrong!and if,i am trying to become vulgar like him!then you have to present any proof!dear dont compare me with him!even i cant write 2 sentences like him as he did in KALI SHALWAR and THANDA GUSHT etc.nor i wants!how much i am relegius you know me little!
    4)once again u have talent, use it in a positive way!
    Ans;i am afraid that you are again wrong!i dint use it negatively!if expressing of some thing by exact words are wrong then i will present many verses of all holy books!not only this what do u think about medical books?the entire theme of vulgarity is to make people sick!where in my stories u cant see this!Intention is the main thing!i dont know that you are aware or not but many people enjoys certain parts of holy books..because they have different intentions of reading,and you know some sick people also says that there are many …….verses in holy books?at mean time they avoid the intention behind that those verses seems vulgar!if you r right then plz tell me where i did!and dont give out of context sentences!
    5) one day u’ll be a shamed of it.
    Ans;if my understanding of quran and hadith is wrong then(khda na khsta)yes!but,i will be lucky beacuse ALLAH loves people how feels shame on there actions!but i think quran is on my side so i will not! In shALLAH!oh my God u are getting me absolutely wrong you havnt get the main theme!
    6)Pakistan needs strong character!
    Ans)where u see my looseness of character?i think Pakistan needs straight forward youth far from hypocrisy!
    7)I hope u don’t mind my criticism,
    Ans;oh,i love criticism you know why?through that i predicts on which step of intellectuality u people are standing!
    and by the way thnx a lot my cousin your criticism was expected so didn’t shocked me!keep visiting my next story will not be criticize by that end!For God sake try to understand basic intention !salam

    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Tuesday, October 27, 2009 8:17:36 PM
    khair baba ye ap k leye ha!bahut say writers jin ka ap nay nam leya wo pesha war thay!jo pait k leye likhtay thayos zamnay main jinseyat ka muozo bilkol naya tha!jis ki wajha say onhay rezak mil raha tha!yahun kon mujhy checks bhaj raha ha opear ha bhi add free! bigsmile

    Unregistered user # Wednesday, October 28, 2009 2:17:37 AM
    Anonymous writes: Ohhhhhhhhhhh My God, plzzzzzzzzzz dont compare ur immature writing with Holy books, Un ka Maqsad logoo ki Hidayat hai na ke Society ko be-hiss kar do Gunah-e-Kabira( Zina) ke barey mien baat kar kar ke. What do u think of urself? You dont have respect for Holy books, How can u mention them in ur response, I can see how religious u r. Where in the holy book a Tawaif been prasied like u did, I Just wanted to warn u, I found many flaws in ur stories like u mentioned Bombay as Mumbai as on the other hand u were taking about old times when it was Bombay not Mumbai, And keep in mind u will be answerable for each n every word u say or write in front of Allah. You proved one more thing that u r not open to critisium, Manto and other writers had grip in their stories, abhi aap ko aik sadi chahiye unki tarah ka likhne ke liye, Many tried to follow them but failed, I dont like them either but still respect their point of view and this what u should do. Plz never ever mention Holy books in ur writings if u think u r just then go a head write whatever u want but Allah is watching…………..

    Unregistered user # Wednesday, October 28, 2009 2:22:16 AM
    Anonymous writes: One more thing did u only get ideas about sex, aur woh bhi Zina, Kia kuch aur nahi bacha likhne ke liye??????????? Ist story = about Tawaif 2nd story = about Extra marital affair ( Zina mien bhi ziya bara Gunah, married ki saza bhi ziyada hai) ohhhh my God Humari Naye nasal kahan ja rahi hai. Mulk tabah ho raha hai aur ye sex ki importance pe baat kar rahe hain.

    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Wednesday, October 28, 2009 3:56:16 AM
    Anonymous writer again:originally posted by him/her,
    1){2nd story = about Extra marital affair ( Zina mien bhi ziya bara Gunah, married ki saza bhi ziyada hai)…
    Ans;first this thing should be clear in second story i mentioned that they have not committed adultery!see page 3 of MISS CALLS SARD RATAY AUR DO JISM!para 4,
    {mutarma nay osay har tarhn ki azadi day rakhi thi…magar fuji nay sirf maun pay qanat karay ka faisla keya!}
    and you are talking about zina??in shariat can we call it zina?oh!i can guess about your knowledge in sharia!it is a sin but not zina!dont try to mis guide people please!i ans according to sharia because you mentioned the punishment under it!
    2)Ist story = about Tawaif
    Ans:lolz,it was my second story!i believe,you cant understand this one! even after 100 years!i myself dont like to explain the main aim of writing it!because words limits the scope…and i dont want to to describe the scope of this story!
    3)Where in the holy book a Tawaif been prasied like u did!
    ANS;Want to say tow things!Telling a reality is prasing?if KHANAM impressed you through her style then what can i do?
    And tell me where i did appreciated her or her work while she was not doing that when writer met her!(intention of praisning is appreciation)…ain’t?so!with due respect you are wrong again!
    4)Ohhhhhhhhhhh My God, plzzzzzzzzzz dont compare ur immature writing with Holy books,
    Un ka Maqsad logoo ki Hidayat hai na ke Society ko be-hiss kar do Gunah-e-Kabira( Zina) ke barey mien baat kar kar ke.
    Ans)tell me what is the end of miss calls?haven’t see the aspect of Hedayat?what happened with her at last??don’t for get her end before talking on her character!
    5)You dont have respect for Holy books,
    Ans;OH!very disappointing!how can u say that?you are going against the principle of Ethics!feeling?
    6) How can u mention them in ur response?(holy books)
    Ans:AH!in Quran ALLAH says!”hamay agar samjhany k leye machar ki misal bhi deni paray tu hum………….;remember?and is there is any need of quoting all the references regarding explanatory method of Quran?
    7)Mombay=bombay!
    Ans;lol!this is good point but very sorry this is composing mistake,dahli=deli,and there are many other! bigsmile
    dear read it out once again with due care may ALLAH give you peace and true understanding of his book!let people will decide how is right and who is wrong!
    Religious fanatics are not equal to religious wises
    Aur ma nay kab dawa keya k ma manto ki tarhun likh raha hun??
    please it was your sentnce that(dont try to be like manto)manto aur mujh ma farq rakhyee nahi tu kabhi bhi na samjh pain gay na ajj na 1000 saal bad!

    Unregistered user # Thursday, October 29, 2009 3:40:47 PM
    aaila noor writes: nice criticism iz goin there…… waisy tanqeed achi hai dono taraf sy per is story mein itna sex ka zikar nhi jitni tanqeed sakht hai r bilawajah hai. meray khiyaal sy anonymous ny na tou minto ko parha r na hi mirza haadi ruswa ko…..amrao jan ada tou aik classic hai lakhnow ka per aik cheez burai tou humara har taraf hai baat tou sab kerty hin per jab koi kalam uthata hai tou tanqeed kerny lagty hein aur is mein hai jis per itna shore hai simple story hai with a lesson n wo souch jo hum sab mein hai r mr anonymous mein bhi i think. aik souch r tarze fikar ko biyaan kerny sy koi vulgar nhi hota . manto ka naam tou liya app ny per phir tanqeed bhi ki uss per halank app sy buri tanqeed ki gaey us per ahly adab ki taraf sy jo adab ko janty r hum kia hein. kehty hein dunya ka sab sy aasan kaam tankeed kerna hai jis ko kuch nnhi aata wo tanqeed kerta hai….. waisy tou koi likhta nhi per jo likhty hein unko tanked sy hum paida honay sy phly maar detay hein…. app story ko sirf emotion sy nhi fani r fikri tarz per dekhein jo ghlatian wo baja grip kamzoor ho sakti hai kyun k new hai perfection tou likhny sy aatai hai jahan tak topic ka taluk hai wo vulgar nhi hai ye bohat hi low levl ki tankeed hai. story aik achi koshish hai society mein jo kuch hai kia hum r app nhi dekh rhy laiken kisi mein ikhlaki jurrat nhi stand leney ki jo kuch bayan kerta jo pura such nhi per souchny per bacboor kerta hai kuch galat hai humari souch mein humaray ammal mein hum us ka raasta bhi band kerty hein….app is ko positive lo tou bura nhi lagay ga deeply soucho aik mkhsoos tabkai fikar ko le ker nhi jis ka kaam hi yehi hai…….

    Unregistered user # Monday, November 2, 2009 7:00:55 PM
    Mosa nawaz from peshawar writes: Hummm, I guess Ibe Mufti you should be careful, Agar zara sa phislay tu ghalat taraf chale jao gay, I can see y some people criticized, they r right , but u should not be disrespectful towards readers, If some one critize, take it positively, my friend they were not wrong either, u had sex eliment in ur stories and u can not justify it by mentioning any holy book. U still have time, aplogize………….

    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Monday, November 2, 2009 7:08:54 PM
    lolz!app logo ki ankhain kahan chali gai hain?kya saray mazahbi dewany meri hi kismat main hain?Ba qol e aalia noor(ye bohat hi low levl ki tankeed hai.)lakin app ko assa lagta ha tu …ap sahi ho gay..apni jaga!ma ainda…mazeed ahteyat karunga!lakin main sirf daleel mangta hun app wo day do..nahi ha tu galat baat na karo!holy books tu mention hungi har hal main!inshallah!k wohi sahi aur galat ka mayar hain!

    Unregistered user # Tuesday, September 29, 2009 8:20:47 PM
    decent writes: i was jus checking if story is ther or not. any ways i am waiting for story.
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    Unregistered user # Thursday, December 24, 2009 10:55:54 PM
    Anonymous writes: i think its good iniciation in urdu adab .after reading it completely i shall comment
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    Unregistered user # Monday, December 28, 2009 5:55:46 AM
    fire writes: asak.apreciate u baseer. but still the theme is to clear.aur thoda simple karke likhte shayad result achha hota.title short rahna aaj kal ka fashion hain.
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Monday, December 28, 2009 7:43:28 AM
    result acha hi ha mam!aur ma dunya ko kyun follow karun?kyun na assa baan jaun k dunya mujhy follow karay?lolz just kidding…acha so ropay pay bhi nazar e karam farma deghyee!
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    Anonymous writes: Ali bhai bahut achi bath hai aik aik comment zaroori hoga har page pay
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    Unregistered user # Friday, September 25, 2009 2:53:54 PM
    Anonymous writes: interesting story…. and good theme of story I like it

    Unregistered user # Wednesday, September 23, 2009 9:11:43 PM
    Anonymous writes: i like stroy in some places its kind of get me lost but u u have put some more effort in to it.lekin foji sirf des ke liye larta he miscals ke dhoke ma nahi ata.bachon ka kiya zaroori ta beghar karna lekin its is nice story ho.me 4 time pari i like it keep it up.and dont ans miss calls nahi tu phir ye story likhni paregi.bye
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Thursday, September 24, 2009 9:46:19 AM
    thnx Mr anonymous..next week inshallah aik aur post karain gay!zaroor parhye ga aur comments b dejhye ga!
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    Unregistered user # Friday, September 25, 2009 10:27:10 PM
    Anonymous writes: i can’t wait for another story ilove story like that. thnaks
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Friday, September 25, 2009 11:05:56 PM
    thnxx alot!going to post So Ropay Ka Soda inshallah within 2 days..wo kya ha k ap kabhi bhool nahi pain gay osay!kash ap log apna naam ya koi neshani hi choor jaya karain!comments kye..dil say maskoor hun.
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    Unregistered user # Friday, September 25, 2009 11:53:28 PM
    1 friend writes: ok sure this will be my name 1 friend. i just read it again and bohath rolaya he ap ki story ne. every time its get more interesting.i love it.
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Saturday, September 26, 2009 6:40:09 AM
    1 friend kuch ansoo tu bacha leghye…shaid zaroor paray!aur ansoo udher nahi miltay!
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    Unregistered user # Tuesday, September 29, 2009 8:28:45 PM
    decent writes: salam, jus checking on stroy.take ur time i will check again.ALLAH HAFIZ
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Tuesday, September 29, 2009 10:37:14 PM
    walikum salam sis!i having some composing problems otherwise the story is just ready for publication!can u wait 1 or 2 days sis!
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    MuaviaMuavia2 # Wednesday, October 28, 2009 4:39:06 PM
    second story pari…. jitni achi is story ki shurohat ti utna hi acha ikhtitam, jo is bat ki ghamazi krta hy k apjinab ko km se km apny field ( insani bunyado pr fard ki zehni halton ka tajzia) pe zara behter uboor hasil ho rahi hy, to shuro ma mjy yaqinan kafi becheni mehsoos howi… ab ap soch rahy hngy k bahi becheni kis bat ki… wo islye, qk aisi story ka ikhtitam waisa hi hota hy k jaisy aksar hamary rawayeti writers apni liki howi story ka apny qalam se gala gont dety hy. story k shuro ma is nacheez ka teri story k ikhtitam k bary ma WALAh wahi khayal guzra. lakin behrhaal is bar hamy teri story ma wo elements itny ziada nazar nahi aye. kl rat teri second story parny se pehley meri nazar kuch coments jo ghalban teri second story pe diye gaye ty pr padi, to mjy mehsos ho rha ta k zaror is ibnemufti ne koi garbar ki hogi… lakin story ko ghor se parny k bad meri nazar se to koi aisi ikhlaq se giri howi ya qabil e qadghan ibarat nahi guzri. behrhaal is nacheez ko story parny k bad ye ray qayem krni padi k tm ne fitrat k sab se haseen or qabil e qadar element ko apna mozu e khaas banaya hy.. Han meri guzarish apjinab se ye hogi k story ko hatalimkan asaan fahem bany ki koshish kia karain taky apjinab k khayalat tk hr aam wa khas ki rasayi ho qk ek writer pori kainat ki turjumani kr raha hota hy sirf ek khas tabqy ki nahi. Ab zahir hy jb likat ka zuban haam fhem na ho pir baley wo jitna bi azeem khayalat or tasawutat ka malik q na ho pir bi badnam to hongy or ilzam to lagyngy jaist hamary philosophy k pehley shaheed Soqraat, Gharibo ka alambardar Karel Marx ya pir Osho Rajneesh. keep it up, wasalaam
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Wednesday, October 28, 2009 5:00:28 PM
    ah!qasam say!koi ghuar say pary tu sahi!intention khud samjh ajata ha!muavia bro ye meri kush naseebi ha k app nay is story ko waqt deya aur khas kar apnay comments!main app ki ray ki yun bhi qadar karta hun k ma awam ka writer bana chata hun khawas ya akh-wa-sul-khaws ka tu inshallah ban hi jun ga jo app lo rah numai farmaty rahay!thnx again!
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    Unregistered user # Wednesday, January 6, 2010 10:58:00 AM
    fire writes: WAH….KYA BAT HAIN………..SSENA TAAN K CAHLNE LAGTA HAIN JAISA K JANNAT US PAR WAJIB HAIN…(OVER CONFIDENT)ONE OF THE REASON OF JAWAL OF MUSLIM COMMUNITY
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    Unregistered user # Wednesday, January 6, 2010 12:36:21 PM
    fire writes: ARSH SE GIR K ZAMEEN PAR SAMBHALA NAHI INSAN SEENE MEI BASAKAR TAKABBUR KO… JANA KAHAN HAI USE……../ TAMANNA JANNAT KA HAIN MAGAR RAASTA JAHANNAM KA
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Wednesday, January 6, 2010 4:05:25 PM
    kon si zada pasand ai?aur kyun?zaroor batana!shukria!
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    Unregistered user # Thursday, January 7, 2010 12:06:22 PM
    Anonymous writes: Ali.asak.both r two differnet stories with differnt themes.if i read two stories which ve same theme then can say which is good.i like the stories .If u can write stories on social evils which is polluting the Islamic culture also benificiable for all.And i would like to see some stories of the impact of westernisation and globalisation.Wish u all the best…sadaf
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Thursday, January 7, 2010 12:31:16 PM
    hummm good!but i am a new bottle with old wine lol!yes INSHALLAH i will try and thnax for wishing jee!
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    Unregistered user # Friday, January 8, 2010 10:28:56 AM
    fire writes: Ali.asak. INSAAN sonchta kuch hian kahta kuch hain karta kuch hain hojata kuch aur hain AAISA KYON HAIN????????? story banjagi ispe?????????????sadaf
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Friday, January 8, 2010 3:49:21 PM
    phalay tum mujhy khuda aur banday main farq bato! sad sad
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    Unregistered user # Sunday, January 10, 2010 10:14:52 AM
    sadaf writes: ALI.ASAK……..A POEM FOR U NA…KORIKA ————- EEDO CHEYYALANI….CHESI TEERALANI.. GAGANAM LO VIHANGA MAI EGARALANI… KADALILO TARANGAMAI EEDALANI…. GAALILO TEMAGA MIGALALANI.. PRUDWILO SASYAMAI..MOLAWALANI… CHANDRIMALO…CHALLAGA ODAGALANI.. SURAYABIBHAM LO…KIRANAMAI..MERAWALANI.. MANISHILO… MANAWATWAMAI…MIGALALANI NAA KORIKA… CHIRU KORIKA..CHARA KALAPU KORIKA MARI NEE KORIKA???????????/
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Sunday, January 10, 2010 11:09:17 AM
    ab iska tarjima bhi farma deghyee!lolz jis ko ye zabun samjhnay ka dawa ha wo ma nahi! bigsmile walikum salam
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    Unregistered user # Sunday, January 10, 2010 1:35:11 PM
    sadaf writes: ali.asak. aap likho bole mei lkh di .so its ur headache to get it done the translation.wish u all the best BUT YET IF U NEEDS THE TRANSLATION BY ME U NEEDS TO PAY FOR THAT.
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Sunday, January 10, 2010 3:41:11 PM
    ma nay kaha na jis nay kaha tha wo koi aur tha..ali nahi!ab itna karam keya ha tu 2 ,4 bund aur sahi!tarjuma farma deghyee!lol bigsmile kain tum bana tu nahi rahi is miskeen say adami ko!aur ho ye ko mahmal say alfaz! p
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    Unregistered user # Thursday, September 9, 2010 12:10:11 PM
    saima sahiba writes: kahani 3 characters ki hai …husband jo apni bivi ko maar ker dili taskeen hasil kertha hai…..bivi jo apni taskeen key lieyey doosrey ko hypocrat kerthi hai ..our dili sakoon hasil kerthi hai..fouji jo key aik qaahir insaan hai ..khud uss ka koi faisla nahin hotha kahan bohat achhi likhi gai hai …mager beech main aa ker aisa mehsoos hova key rabth toot gaya ho topic sey ….laikin aakhir main phir sey kahani ko jorr diya gaya uss key topic sey.. words bohat hi nayab istemaal kieyey gaey …….mager yehh short story ourr bhi short ho sakthi thi achha likhari wohi hotha hai jo story key lafzon ko lafz main biyan krey i think aap love story bohat achhi likhh sakthey …try it plz …i will b waiting of ur love story…all the best….
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    Muhammed Baseer Ali H,ibn e muftiibnemufti # Friday, September 10, 2010 11:55:16 AM
    ahaaaam!ty 4 commenting mam!

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